I only did peer evaluation for the first draft, as I felt this version would be the one with more problems, there would be more to take notice of, rather than the second version.
Michael (Photography Student) said "The highlight was obviously Giovanni. Editing was fine, pretty sleek for the most part, the footage captured was interesting. The framing was pretty off at point, such as missing part of your head, needs a bit of space above the head. Depth of view gets messed up around the 0:57 mark. The amount of media references is outstanding, covering all the ground you really could. Another issue is at around 0:55, where the field of view affects the lighting. It's not bad, it just not necessarily great."
Alex (Media A2 Student) said "Like: The miss en scene on your desk, mic, computer, cartoons on screen made you seem more like a passionate filmmaker into your topic.
It was a conventional documentary intro (interview clips with little context to intrigue viewer), rousing music. But with the films own personal twist shown through keyframing and handheld pan shots. Especially with that handheld Yu-Gi-Oh transition.
Smoothness of 2:26 I tried one of those in my A2 coursework and it flopped.
Dislikes:
Rabbidluigi's footage. I would turn off if I saw that in a real documentary.
Not enough footage recorded by yourself."
Joshua (Gaming and Anime fan) said "Disclaimer needs background noise of some variety, because it drags on. It feels empty. When you brought out the Gameboy, the audio of the game was hard to hear, the sound needs to be altered here. When listing the games, images of the character could be placed across, to place emphasis on those series. I like the idea of showing the game collection, though it could be refilmed to make the image clearer. It's a problem I can understand, but it's very noticeable. The RabbidLuigi joke feels like an inside joke, which isn't something you want to risk. After thinking about it, I stopped paying attention to what he was saying because I was questioning it's purpose. Similar thoughts with Giovanni, could probably be funnier if the names were gone, titles remained. Sharla segment is audio problematic, a little out of place because nothing was hinted at in terms of distaste for Harry Potter. All it would take is one line. It startled me with how out of place it was, but that unfortunately was how it ended. More interesting text could be used for what you like. However, as you know, I'm bad with praise. Everything I haven't pointed out was done right as far as I know. I fire of complaints, and when asked to praise I just feel awful, but hey, you have nice hair."
Response
I do agree with a lot of the complaints the people who've watched it have pointed out. Regardless of whether stuff like the Rabbid clip hit my intention, it doesn't mean the audience would interpret it the same, which leads to problems. I've left clear audio and visual problems in that aren't very professional, and wouldn't slide in that scenario. I agree with the general consensus, it gets stuff right, but it gets a lot wrong. All I can do is take this on board to avoid it happening in the future and while a lot of these problems remain in the final draft, I can hopefully avoid it if another mockumentary project is under my supervision.
Alex (Media A2 Student) said "Like: The miss en scene on your desk, mic, computer, cartoons on screen made you seem more like a passionate filmmaker into your topic.
It was a conventional documentary intro (interview clips with little context to intrigue viewer), rousing music. But with the films own personal twist shown through keyframing and handheld pan shots. Especially with that handheld Yu-Gi-Oh transition.
Smoothness of 2:26 I tried one of those in my A2 coursework and it flopped.
Dislikes:
Rabbidluigi's footage. I would turn off if I saw that in a real documentary.
Not enough footage recorded by yourself."
Joshua (Gaming and Anime fan) said "Disclaimer needs background noise of some variety, because it drags on. It feels empty. When you brought out the Gameboy, the audio of the game was hard to hear, the sound needs to be altered here. When listing the games, images of the character could be placed across, to place emphasis on those series. I like the idea of showing the game collection, though it could be refilmed to make the image clearer. It's a problem I can understand, but it's very noticeable. The RabbidLuigi joke feels like an inside joke, which isn't something you want to risk. After thinking about it, I stopped paying attention to what he was saying because I was questioning it's purpose. Similar thoughts with Giovanni, could probably be funnier if the names were gone, titles remained. Sharla segment is audio problematic, a little out of place because nothing was hinted at in terms of distaste for Harry Potter. All it would take is one line. It startled me with how out of place it was, but that unfortunately was how it ended. More interesting text could be used for what you like. However, as you know, I'm bad with praise. Everything I haven't pointed out was done right as far as I know. I fire of complaints, and when asked to praise I just feel awful, but hey, you have nice hair."
Response
I do agree with a lot of the complaints the people who've watched it have pointed out. Regardless of whether stuff like the Rabbid clip hit my intention, it doesn't mean the audience would interpret it the same, which leads to problems. I've left clear audio and visual problems in that aren't very professional, and wouldn't slide in that scenario. I agree with the general consensus, it gets stuff right, but it gets a lot wrong. All I can do is take this on board to avoid it happening in the future and while a lot of these problems remain in the final draft, I can hopefully avoid it if another mockumentary project is under my supervision.
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